Answer to Question #239257 in English for Tholy

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Rewrite the lead paragraph of the media release below so that it addresses the deficiencies , errors and omissions that you may have identified in the previous question:

Matriculation Dresses from Stella Fashions Will Help You Too Look Like A Star for Your Matriculation Dance and It is Not Too Expensive At All ( Trust Me)

Johannesrbug ( SashayNews.com) 09/03_ We all remember our matric dances, right? It is a night to remember. And in the age of social media , you need to dress to impress . A dress boutik named Stella Fashions located in the Mall of Africa and online also . Come find your dress here . It is the best dress shop in South Africa. Only celebrities shop here but we also allow normal people and normal prices here too . If there is a celebrity is our shop don't embarrass us and approach them . Let them shop in peace for God's sake . Lol. We also realise that there are some students who are poor and cannot buy a good dress . So we have decided to give away 5 dresses .

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