Answer to Question #262162 in Management for priya

Question

Come and explore the undiscovered India with us. We provide an excellent service to all those travelling with us. Our special customers staying in seven-star accommodations are treated as kings. If you are one such privileged customer, our staff will be available to you 24x 7. Men would fall in love with the adventurous treks and camps we provide. Mountains and Dunes cares about women and children too. It brings to you the freedom of cooking your meals anytime of the day in the state of art kitchens attached with every accommodation that we provide. So come enjoy and feel at home with Mountains and Dunes. Remember we choose the best locations for you. You will surely enjoy our services. Though our rates are a relatively high but it is justified with the class of tourists we cater to. Bag packers are not out clients. Remember- we are a class apart and so are our clients. How would you rewrite the paragraph if you were given the task of editing the paragraph?

Answer 1

The developer ought not to include the statement "though our rates are high". This will basically deter interested customers from using their services.

The developer included an inappropriate statement "special customers". This is inappropriate in the sense that some customers may view it as if some other customers are treated well as compared to them.

Another statement that is not appropriate is "Bag packers are not out clients." This may send a negative signal to any rational customer.