Answer to Question #281448 in English for Aira

Question

Revise Text A to improve its you-attitude and positive language. Make any other changes necessary to improve the wording of the letter.

TEXT A

Dear Mr. Jacob:

As per your request of September 29, be advised aht we have reviewed your balance sheet and seller reference sheet. Based on this information, we have decided to extend your credit to P 50, 000. Please be aware that paying beyond 30 days is not negotiable and we expect your compliance. We grant a 2.5 discount only if you pay within ten days.

I am looking forward to your orders of our high-quality standard motherboards and custom-designed wiring. Hoping for your continuing interest.

Yours,

Celeste Saveron

Credit Representative, Quill Electronics

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Jacob,

 

I hope this finds you well!

As requested on September 29, 2021, kindly be advised that I have reviewed your balance sheet and seller-reference sheet. Based on this information, I have decided to extend your credit limit to P50,000. Besides, we grant a 2.5% discount only if you pay within ten days. Please be aware that paying beyond 30 days is against the signed terms and conditions, so we expect your compliance.

I am looking forward to your continued cooperation. Thanks in advance

 

Yours,

Celeste Saveron 

Credit Representative, Quill Electronics