Answer to Question #253741 in Management for Nachiket Pawar

Question

Mountains and Dunes a travel company created an attractive and illustrative brochure for its prospective customers. However, an insensitive content writer created the following content which was sure to crash the business.

Come and explore the undiscovered India with us. We provide an excellent service to all those travelling with us. It brings to you the freedom of cooking your meals anytime of the day in the state of art kitchens attached with every accommodation that we provide. So come enjoy and feel at home with Mountains and Dunes. Remember we choose the best locations for you. You will surely enjoy our services. Though our rates are a relatively high but it is justified with the class of tourists we cater to. Bag packers are not out clients. Remember- we are a class apart and so are our clients. b. How would you rewrite the paragraph if you were given the task of editing the paragraph?

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Answer 1

Men would like our exciting excursions and camps. And it enables you to prepare meals at any time of day in the state-of-the-art kitchens that are connected to each of our accommodations.

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